“Hey! Wake up”….. “You
lazy bums”.
“Dad! Allow us to
sleep. It is only two thirty in the morning.”
“Two thirty”. “What two
thirty?”
“Mom! Mom! Look at
your husband.”
“Yes! Kids like you
cannot be mine. Niyati! Come here! Look at your kids.”
“Oh! Not again. It”s
only two forty in the morning. You are over excited.”
“Me Niyati!?… No… It
cannot be. Oh… Yes, it is two forty five now”.
“Come! We will leave
at four thirty for the shore”.
Niyati and Anand,
childhood friends, got married in Mumbai when she was 18 and he, 20. He left
home soon after to pursue his dream of making it big in “professional sailing”.
Niyati and their twins – Rishab and Samarth -- aged 10, used to tour with him
across the globe, but since two years, the childrens” studies had taken
priority. He came back home only last week, after six months of professional
sailing in New Zealand.
Niyati and the kids
enjoyed the closeness to the sea. Anand wanted to be at home, but they insisted
on “adventure sailing” this weekend. He reluctantly agreed and booked his “old
favourite seaside club” for the weekend. The place had rustic surroundings with
abundant natural habitat around it. People loved the place due to its courteous
staff and beautiful landscape.
The family “checked in”
at the club on Saturday evening. The kids were excited as the club
had lots of amenities including a swimming pool, beach volleyball, water sports
and indoor games. Niyati and Anand sat in the Coffee Shop, spending precious
time together.
“Anand, you seem to be
lost somewhere?” Niyati asked him. .
“Nothing! everything
is alright” said Anand.
“When you say: “everything
is alright. I understand. Tell me”, Niyati pushed Anand to share his woes.
“I am feeling
insecure. A typical sense which I had as a kid when I lost my mother in early childhood”,
said Anand.
“Why do you have this
feeling? Are you alright?”
“Yes, sort of, Niyati.
I had a tough childhood. My father took care of us. He played the dual role of
a father and mother. It”s difficult for a father to manage the household when
no lady is around”, said Anand.
“You are unnecessarily
getting worried. I do not get any of these feelings”, said Niyati. “I am of the
view that we will live together “hale and hearty” till we are eighty …. no
eighty five.”
“I cannot imagine life
without you…Niyati. Especially the kids who love you like anything”, said Anand
emotionally.
“Anand…You are scaring
me now”, Niyati seemed to be concerned, but burst out laughing the next moment.
“You will never get
serious”, Anand stood up from the seat.
“O My Love! Please be
seated”, Niyati grabbed Anand by his wrist and pulled him down.
“What do you want?”
Anand asked Niyati sternly.
“Even a small thing
can’t harm you. If something ever happens to you, I will come in between
you and the bad omen”, said Niyati looking deeply into Anand”s eyes.
“I will always be
around. You need not worry, my dear”. Anand got up from the seat and extended
his hand towards her.
She looked towards him
and immediately stood up to shake a leg with him. She rested her head on his
shoulder and enjoyed the closeness. Anand was a doting husband and caring
father. She was always proud of him.
The next day, the
family boarded the “sailing boat” with food, drinks and a handy-cam exactly at five in the morning, as planned. Rishab was very fond of clicking beautiful
pictures and shooting “exclusive” videos. Anand wanted to have an exclusive
experience, so the entire boat was booked for the family. Niyati insisted on
having a Captain on board, but Anand rejected the idea. He wanted to sail this
important trip all by himself and did not want an outsider on board. He also felt
it was demeaning to him, as he could manage the show easily.
The stage was set for
a beautiful journey into the sea. Anand took to the helm and set the boat into
motion. The image of the boat departing Gateway and moving across ships while
getting closer deep into the sea was mesmerizing. The Mumbai shoreline with
celebrated buildings in the backdrop, made it picture perfect. Anand put off
the engine when the boat reached deep in the sea to enjoy the surroundings. The
family relaxed and set up the breakfast on the deck.
However, unexpectedly,
the weather started playing spoilsport after some time. It changed rapidly from
quiet and soothing to violent. It turned the experience sour as managing the
sailboat was becoming difficult. The seas pushed by the violent tides, build
high walls in front of them.
“Rishab, be cautious.
Do not stand on the deck”, shouted Niyati, who wanted to capture the changed
weather on his handy-cam.
“Let it be Niyati. He
has almost become a Pro”, said Anand gleefully.
“Oh My God! Anand…
Anand… Rishab has fallen into the sea”
“Take care of the
tiller”, Anand immediately jumped into the sea towards Rishab.
The next few seconds
were traumatic. A high tide had swept Rishab away. It was becoming difficult
for Anand to swim with his life jacket. He took off his life jacket and swam
fiercely towards Rishab. Anand, the expert that he was, caught Rishab from the
back of his life jacket and pulled him towards the boat. In no time, he was near
the boat with Rishab.
“Niyati… Niyati…” Anand
was gasping for air.
“Yes Anand. “Rishab”
is safe. Come over.”
She could not believe
the turn of events herself. Anand, a professional, was not able to hold himself
in the waters. It seemed something was pulling him into the sea. Even before
she realised, he was some twenty feet away from the boat. To her surprise, he
wore a soulful smiling look and waved to her.
“Noooooo… Anand”.
Niyati took her life jacket off and jumped into the sea without thinking about
herself. She swam at a fierce pace. The more she tried to reach him, the
farther the distance between them grew.
“Oh Lord… listen…
please listen”, she called out.
“Tell me, my child, “
she heard a profound voice coming somewhere from deep. She saw a magnificent
bright light showering towards her. Everything seemed formless, time seemed to
have stopped for the next “sixteen minutes”. Those “sixteen minutes” were the
time between life and the death.
“Oh Lord!… Can
you hear me?”. She tried to stop her tears, but it didn”t matter as nobody
would notice.
“Yes, my child “.
“Lord… Lord… My
husband”, she cried within. The sea would have looked shallow if she cried.
“Feel who is beside
you”
Niyati turned her face
around to find Anand beside her. He was smiling, calm and soulful.
“Thank you, my Lord”,
Niyati got hold of Anand”s wrist and tried pulling him towards the boat. His
body was stiff, heavy and did not move an inch.
“He has chosen the
time” said the Lord.
“No… No… Anand!…
Anand!”, Niyati got hold him, pulled him violently.
“Niyati!…”
“Yes, My Lord”, said
Niyati.
“No. It”s me…Anand”
“Oh, Anand!…We are
blessed!. Come, we will swim to safety”, said Niyati confidently.
“You tried… didn”t
you?” Anand pulled his hand out of Niyati”s clutch.
“Yes… but don”t waste
time… It”s almost ten minutes in the water. I do not know how are we
alive?” Niyati pleaded to Anand.
“I can”t…Together we
can”t”
“Why not Anand. Come
don”t waste time”
“The time has come,
Niyati. The kids need you.”
“I cannot live without
you… Anand. Come, the kids need you as well”. Niyati got hold of Anand”s hand…
again.
“Niyati, do not test
nature. Our kids are destined to have a single parent”, said Anand to Niyati. “Go
back, Now!”.
“How could I leave….?”
Niyati could not complete the sentence. She had swallowed sea water. She was
choking. Anand wanted to help but was not in a position to do so. Niyati became
calm and composed. She became very light and saw a big ball of light attracting
her. The light emanated from a white formless body.
“Oh Lord. Give me my
husband.” Niyati could recognize Him.
“He is with you only.”
“No, I cannot see him.”
“Feel him beside you.
He was always there and will be”, said the Lord.
Niyati understood. “What
do you want me to do, Lord?”
“Your kids are
destined to have a single parent. Go back…He has taken your place”.
The whole family,
including Niyati was in a state of shock after the incident. Niyati kept
murmuring, while she lay in bed at home. ““The last sixteen minutes” changed
our lives forever”…. “It was me who had to go… How could Anand…?” “How could
God listen to his request….?”
It was Not in Destiny!
Saurabh, Its a nice concept and suspense at the end was good. Your narrative needs tightening up. The story line is a bit confusing as far as the dialogues of the "Lord" at the end. Most of the narrative is in dialogue form. You could have put descriptive paragraphs for some action and given a bit of characterization of Niyati, what she did for a living or her interests. My stories are worse. So take heart and write your heart out. Good luck.
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